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Post by indi52 on 2013-11-13, 21:09

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chapter 2




thereafter rose desire in the beginning, desire, the primal seed and germ of spirit.

~~~ rig veda, hymn cxxix ~~~



she stood there, looking down at him. he lay in that hospital bed, hard white sheets, a pillow under his head. but where's the cushion, she thought. he always liked to tuck a sturdy square cushion under his neck, she must tell di... then she stopped herself. again her mind went blank and she stared at him lying there eyes closed, no expression on his face, covered in sheets up to his chin, so wan and still... were those beads of sweat on his temple?

oh these thoughts, why wouldn't they stop? khushi didn't want to see this, didn't want to be here, didn't want to know anything... the details... the unfamiliar words.

vital signs not steady. pressure fluctuating. oxygenation levels. coma. diabetes... complications. ventilator.

the word shuddered through her and she drooped, winded. she had to let her eyes shift and rest on something other than that beautiful closed face... her eyes found a ridiculous bottle of hand sanitizer on the portable table near the foot of the bed. what could a sanitizer do when... when...

khushi swallowed hard. she couldn't finish such sentences... she closed her eyes and without thinking said what felt like a prayer to her.

"ar...nav... ji."

on the silence and stillness of the room it fell like the first drops of rain. tender, moist, with a smell of earth in it... of life.

***

when she could finally hear the words the doctor, that man in white, said, it had all sounded like gibberish. really, it was time for arnav ji's medicines and this man was going on and on. but when she turned to complain to di, the truth was there in her eyes and try as she might khushi couldn't look away.

"chhotey ko kuch nahin hoga, hai na, khushi ji?" her sister in law, older than her by many years, needed khushi to assure her that nothing would happen to her dear little brother. a strange touch and go moment.

one will never know if di really was so helpless then or she did a little ramanchi only to bring khushi back out of her locked out state of mind. whatever it was, it seemed to work. khushi held di's hands and lay her head on her shoulders, eyes clearing at last.

the afternoon sun, the hurtling blue and white bus... but he was still breathing.

saansey... his breath was still here. she took a long long breath and asked permission to see him... alone. just for a while, if di and akash and jiji didn't mind.

time had however stood unmoving from that moment when she saw him against the white. critical care unit, bed no. 6611, constant monitoring advised. not out of danger.

arnav ji, surrounded by machines, wires and needles everywhere, funny lights flickering on monitors, and he lay there among them. so so so far from her.

***

"arnav ji," she whispered again and with her eyes still tightly closed she wished she could run to him and throw herself on his wide, warm, solid chest, feel his arms go around her so she could tell him there was no way she could bear this... she couldn't lose him... she wouldn't be able to live without...


what was that? was that a gust of wind?

her eyes opened with a start, and the hand sanitizer was right before them.

hand? she turned and looked at the sheets that covered him, she moved them gently and felt for his hand. there it was, his right hand, long sturdy fingers... she held it with both of hers, her soft palms delicate yet so desperate at that instant. she pulled his arm out over the covers and then as though guided by something outside herself, took his hand straight to where her heart beat and lay it over the spot, she held his fingers in a loving grip and pressed them to her heart.

why does my heart beat faster when you're near?

again a weird detail her gaze picked involuntarily, the ventilator pipe that entered arnav ji's mouth. it was so thick, and ridged, and bright bright blue.

***

sunlight glinted on the fresh, morning blue water. a lithe supple arm rose out of it and neatly spliced the undulating surface going back in... and again it came up, again it scythed through the air and cleaved the surface of the huge six lane, fifty metre pool.

arnav singh razada was doing his customary morning laps. forty of them, nonstop, part of his relentless fitness regime. his smooth sculpted body gleamed as he swam, the only swimmer in the massive hotel pool; elegant free style strokes, arms moving in perfect rhythm, tireless legs kicking away, a pair of black speedo trunks and black speedo goggles on. nothing else between him and his target. fifty laps by end of month. it was the sixth  today.

oh the water felt good this hot june morning in lucknow. once the deal was done, he could draw to a close that painful chapter and concentrate on expanding the business. twenty five laps done. onto twenty six.

he lifted his arm and was about to finish the stroke when he felt a massive weight drop on him; heavy, thick, insistent. and the next thing he knew he was plunging right in below the surface, no control, falling swiftly toward the bottom of the pool... just going under... down... down.

as he struggled telling himself not to panic, he noticed his arms were entangled in something... cloth, lots of it, and a... what the... what was this he was grabbing on to? a bundle of some sort.

that brought him back to alertness instantly and he started paddling fast, pushing his way up, holding on to the bundle... now the bundle had sprouted arms and was grasping his neck and shoulders tightly. this called for a "what the" completed. and some more.

by the time he and bundle had come back up, and were out in the sunlight again, gulping air, getting their breath back, his temper had shot right up. he whipped off hsi goggles with a violent move and  opened his mouth to shout... and looked straight into dark eyes drenched in fear, surrounded by thick clotted eyelashes, water streaming down them... he could feel a  tremble below his hands.

it was a girl. he stared mouth open.

his eyes slowly travelled down from her eyes and saw quivering, delicate lips. they were shivering really, maybe the water was too cold? somehow he couldn't look away from them.

then she began to struggle, an expression he couldn't describe entered her eyes. the anger ricocheted back.

"who the hell are you? what are you doing? do you know you could have killed me?" he said brusquely, his voice raised and gravelly.

"chhoriye... chhoriye hume..." she wasn't listening... she was telling him to leave her... let her go... her voice was soft, imploring, worried... a stricken look in her eyes now, as though he was the perpetrator of some unknown crime.

he gripped her shoulders tighter still. his angry molten brown eyes noted that not only had this person fallen on top of him out of nowhere, she was fully dressed in, wait a minute, lehenga... choli... her dupatta swirled around in the pool, billowing out, sparkling in the sun... pink, green, gold.

she was wriggling away getting more frantic every second, and she managed to break free, as she turned to move away, he reached out to pull her back and continue with the questions now tearing through his mind...

but she'd disappeared.

what? where was she? then he saw the flailing arms. without wasting a second, he dived under, plucked her up even as sank, and brought her right up in his arms. so his attacker couldn't swim.

no more talking, he swam across to the edge with her, and came out of the pool carrying this peculiar stranger in his arms, his eyes widened a bit when he saw the sneakers on her feet.

he set her down on a deck chair unceremoniously and said curtly, "ok, this is it... tell me who are you? why did you..."

she stared into his fierce eyes... her mind was in a mess... she thought she was going to drown... and all this man kept on asking her was, who was she... why had she...

and babu ji... amma... oh no, it was morning, they must be worried sick... oh why had she been so silly? why had she believed that ad preeto had shown her... girls wanted for modelling, a day's assignment, a handsome rupees fifty thousand remuneration, all you had to do was report at hotel sheesh mahal, room 1913, with a photograph, do an audition and if you were selected, they'd just take some shots and you're done. job over.

she knew how worried babuji was about jiji's wedding. a demand for a scooter had just come in, she didn't believe in dowry, but she knew her parents had no choice, maybe she could help? she was 18, her father's chief accountant in the sweet shop, but her salary was really the trust and faith he put in her, and of course, jalebis and those delicious balushahis only he could make. this seemed like a nice and simple way to solve a problem.

of course, when she reached, it was something else that she had to provide in return for that money. she'd donned the costume she thought she was modelling, was about to change her shoes, when an oily man walked into the room, he was the sort you stayed away from in a movie theatre, the bus or any lonely place, what was he doing here? as she watched, the others started to leave the room.. and then it struck her...

even as a creepy sensation overtook her entire being starting from the tip of her ears, she ran from there, but the corridors of this heritage hotel were too long, they caught up with her, and threw her into a room, locking her in... promising to return the next morning. she yelled and screamed and maybe that fobbed them off, not wanting to create a commotion in the hotel.

khushi had sat there shivering the whole night. when the door opened, she was ready, hiding behind it... as the two men walked in, she bolted out and sprinted faster than she ever had in her whole life. the bhoolbhulaiya like corridors suddenly opened up on to sunlight, she kept going toward it and when she came out, before she could realise she'd reached the poolside area and stop, she'd tripped on the edge of the pool and fallen right in.

her last thought... "hey devi maiyya, raksha karna,"

and now this terribly angry man was asking her for clarification. she watched his stern and remote face, why was he staring at her like that? like he was a laad governor or something. hoonh.

"i... i... am sorry... let me go please... my parents...i i can't explain..."

"what? can't explain? but you can jump on top of me while i am in a pool and almost kill me in the..." he was hissing through gritted teeth.

how could she tell him what had happened... her family would be shattered if they found out, she had to make up a story... for everyone... if only this laad governor would let her go... she was feeling her anger reach her teeth, but she had to keep calm... amma babuji were waiting.

"look, please let me go, i have had a terrible time, i need to get back home..."

on "home" her voice wobbled dangerously. he looked at her, eyes still stormy. a tear formed and rose to the edge of her eyes. he watched her silently. then he had no idea why, but he felt something welling up inside him. he swallowed.

and stepped back. "wait a minute," he said, voice still brusque, and he reached for his phone lying on the table by the deck chair. "di, good morning, aap zara poolside pe aayengi?" he called his sister and asked her to come over.

as she realised what was happening, khushi started to come undone. her whole body shook as the tension finally began to drain out and a feeling of safety began to come back in. since last evening, fear and danger had stalked her every fibre, no sleep, no food, nothing and no one of her own. just a raw fear.

her knees started knocking, her teeth chattered.

arnav singh raizada felt a surge of protectiveness come over him. why?

he picked up a large beach towel and wrapped it around her fragile, slim, shoulders, and held them in a steady grip.

khushi looked up at the hard jawline, the steely brown eyes. why did she suddenly feel safe and warm?

di had helped her so much that day. and she never asked why she was there that morning in a lehenga choli and sneakers.

***

di walked into the cubicle to find khushi standing with his hand pressed to her chest. she looked at her brother. she remembered maa... she too had been on a ventilator, her last few hours. maa hadn't come back.

chhotey?

khushi stepped forward and now covered him back, then held his shoulders with a steady grip.

she hoped he felt safe.

a question had started to enter her mind, what was a bus doing in a narrow alley in the middle of the afternoon? was it really just an accident?

***
the nurse told dr vijay verma later that twice during the day, arnav singh raizada's vital signs had looked steady and strong.




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thanks so much for reading. i hope you enjoyed. had a really wonderful experience while writing this update. my 12 year old daughter happened to peer over my shoulder as i wrote, "his smooth sculpted body gleamed as he swam," she read out loud. and paused. without even turning, i could feel the "what the" in the air. so of course, i had to turn and meet the expression. "you don't like that line?" i asked. "maa-aa?!!" she said all she could with that elongated word. "what," countered i. "his body... gleaming?" "so what's wrong with that," i persisted. "er, nothing, but a fiftytwo year old woman writing about a younger man like that..." i was giggling by then, so thrilled to have shocked one so young. bad me. then i asked, was it ok if i described something or do fiftytwo year olds lose the right to do that. she asked who was the story about, i said, asr and khushi, of course... nothing to do with me. she said, okay, then that was fine. but after a struggle. it was worth it, my saturday spent at the comp wondering how to craft my words, how not to let that ventilator rattle me.


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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by Shegarf71 on 2013-11-13, 21:45

As a warm ray of sun on a cold windy day
As a drop of rain in the sweltering heat
As silk that's smooth and soft and sleek
Comes a story that raises the heart beat...

Without you...
I was melting then sweating then wondering then swooning then jolted to present then shattered and then numb.....can't wait to read further....
Indi...fabulous and intense as always...

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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by Maria J on 2013-11-13, 22:01

indi52 wrote:
Maria J wrote:Loved it Indi.. 
Thanks for the update so soon.. Waiting for more :)
hi maria,

thanks so much... will update every day the first two weeks, he he i have 16 chapters written... then will be me trying hard for once every 10 days or so.
I'm sure if the already written parts are anything to go by the wait will be worth it :)  Me all ready to wait for ur fabulous parts.. I'm so glad that I could read u.. Reading u transports me to another world altogether :)

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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by Maria J on 2013-11-13, 23:03

hug1 Indi..
Loved the 2nd part.. and also the tid bits about ur daughters reaction was Heart

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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by indi52 on 2013-11-14, 05:09

Shegarf71 wrote:As a warm ray of sun on a cold windy day
As a drop of rain in the sweltering heat
As silk that's smooth and soft and sleek
Comes a story that raises the heart beat...

Without you...
I was melting then sweating then wondering then swooning then jolted to present then shattered and then numb.....can't wait to read further....
Indi...fabulous and intense as always...
meenakshi,

how can you be so sweet to me. i am not that good a writer, but uff the subject mater. that's what does the trick each time.

i love your poem though. mwaah and mwaah for that.

i am so so so glad you are enjoying reading it.

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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by indi52 on 2013-11-14, 05:12

Maria J wrote:hug1 Indi..
Loved the 2nd part.. and also the tid bits about ur daughters reaction was Heart
hi maria,

thanks and i am so glad you are enjoying the story. another world is where these two take me, and though i know it is fantasy, not real, somehow it raises my hopes, makes my day sparkle, i don't want to let go. which is why he he fan fiction. but have to say it's been fun writing it.

my daughter is most concerned about her strange mother as you can see.

:lol!:

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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by Shesherkobita on 2013-11-14, 07:14

Tsk tsk tsk... What's gonna happen to our daughters Indi! Glistening body ROFL ... I think my daughter just said " disgusting" when I said I love BS... She thinks it's cheating.... How is it cheating if I told the whole world that I love him ( as well as my husband)?

Small cushion under his head... You notice everything... Yes, I always wondered how anyone can sleep like that? That hotel scenario is so true... Girls roaming hotel lobbies will give a bad vibe, unfortunately it's true for our countries :(

Love reading your updates... Waiting for the next one.

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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by Shesherkobita on 2013-11-14, 07:19

Indi I wanted to mention... I cannot take my eyes off the edits ...beautiful... Did I ever tell you that I didn't think BS was handsome in the first episodes..I still remember saying to Anusha ... Who is that skinny girl, is she anorexic? She told me .... You've got to watch IPKKND , I joined forums only for them ( arnav and khushi) ... I laughed at your comment about skinny khushi... Apparently both barun and Sanaya have high metabolism ... And here we are ...can't even look at a glass of water without gaining weight.

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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by Maria J on 2013-11-14, 10:48

indi52 wrote:
Maria J wrote:hug1 Indi..
Loved the 2nd part.. and also the tid bits about ur daughters reaction was Heart
hi maria,

thanks and i am so glad you are enjoying the story. another world is where these two take me, and though i know it is fantasy, not real, somehow it raises my hopes, makes my day sparkle, i don't want to let go. which is why he he fan fiction. but have to say it's been fun writing it.

my daughter is most concerned about her strange mother as you can see.

:lol!:
hi indi,

it's been fun reading u.. 
does ur daughter like ASR and Khushi??

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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by indi52 on 2013-11-14, 19:52

Shesherkobita wrote:Indi I wanted to mention... I cannot take my eyes off the edits ...beautiful... Did I ever tell you that I didn't think BS was handsome in the first episodes..I still remember saying to Anusha ... Who is that skinny girl, is she anorexic? She told me .... You've got to watch IPKKND , I joined forums only for them ( arnav and khushi) ... I laughed at your comment about skinny khushi... Apparently both barun and Sanaya have high metabolism ... And here we are ...can't even look at a glass of water without gaining weight.
funnily, the very first time i saw barun i felt the uff... somthing about him is what i thought.

the stuff he exuded got me despite awful serial (shraddha), bad clothes, not at all slick grooming... the energy bursting through, the bent of head, the little hot stuff (issk calls him that) smile, the otherness, and something delhi (where i grew up through my teens and learnt to get attracted to the opposite sex... all of it there.

never followed him though. i am definitely not a tv viewer. completely ignored all promos of ipk thinking oh no they are going to try and do a suave man thing and completely botch it. used to see him in baat at times, but the soap-ness of it all was not my thing. then one late oct/early nov night of 2011 i saw the two by the poolside and almost fell off my bed.

that was that.

never had i ever been to a forum... but from oct till march every yt entry under barun and ipk had been devoured. his goofiness adored, his wise little sayings taken to heart. then came forced marriage and the marionette making of the thin girl... i had to come to the forum to find sanity. heven't left since. :)

that thin girl was terrific. just saw a silhouette of hers, tall and thin in red lehenga against desert sands. i do hope it was not a perspective thing and she indeed is that tall and thin there. have to say, the only man i could see standing there gazing at her with blazing g=brown eyes was the one with high metabolism... the ecto whatever.
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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by indi52 on 2013-11-14, 19:53

Maria J wrote:
indi52 wrote:
Maria J wrote:hug1 Indi..
Loved the 2nd part.. and also the tid bits about ur daughters reaction was Heart
hi maria,

thanks and i am so glad you are enjoying the story. another world is where these two take me, and though i know it is fantasy, not real, somehow it raises my hopes, makes my day sparkle, i don't want to let go. which is why he he fan fiction. but have to say it's been fun writing it.

my daughter is most concerned about her strange mother as you can see.

:lol!:
hi indi,

it's been fun reading u.. 
does ur daughter like ASR and Khushi??
teehee, i think she is a bit wary of them and is certain her mother has lost it.

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Post by romail apa g on 2013-11-14, 22:56

loved it ...just one question ..d flqsh backs ...dey r sumhow different ....are dey or dey r d illusions or life of parallel worlds ..like dreams .....???

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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by indi52 on 2013-11-15, 00:06

romail apa g wrote:loved it ...just one question ..d flqsh backs ...dey r sumhow different ....are dey or dey r d illusions or life of parallel worlds ..like dreams .....???
hi romail,

thanks. not dreams, unless they are, which you can tell really... otherwise parts from other times intheir lives. their past is very similar to what we've seen in ipk, but just a bit different in the details.

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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by Shegarf71 on 2013-11-15, 04:23

indi52 wrote:
Shesherkobita wrote:Indi I wanted to mention... I cannot take my eyes off the edits ...beautiful... Did I ever tell you that I didn't think BS was handsome in the first episodes..I still remember saying to Anusha ... Who is that skinny girl, is she anorexic? She told me .... You've got to watch IPKKND , I joined forums only for them ( arnav and khushi) ... I laughed at your comment about skinny khushi... Apparently both barun and Sanaya have high metabolism ... And here we are ...can't even look at a glass of water without gaining weight.
funnily, the very first time i saw barun i felt the uff... somthing about him is what i thought.

the stuff he exuded got me despite awful serial (shraddha), bad clothes, not at all slick grooming... the energy bursting through, the bent of head, the little hot stuff (issk calls him that) smile, the otherness, and something delhi (where i grew up through my teens and learnt to get attracted to the opposite sex... all of it there.

never followed him though. i am definitely not a tv viewer. completely ignored all promos of ipk thinking oh no they are going to try and do a suave man thing and completely botch it. used to see him in baat at times, but the soap-ness of it all was not my thing. then one late oct/early nov night of 2011 i saw the two by the poolside and almost fell off my bed.

that was that.

never had i ever been to a forum... but from oct till march every yt entry under barun and ipk had been devoured. his goofiness adored, his wise little sayings taken to heart. then came forced marriage and the marionette making of the thin girl... i had to come to the forum to find sanity. heven't left since. :)

that thin girl was terrific. just saw a silhouette of hers, tall and thin in red lehenga against desert sands. i do hope it was not a perspective thing and she indeed is that tall and thin there. have to say, the only man i could see standing there gazing at her with blazing g=brown eyes was the one with high metabolism... the ecto whatever.
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Here I find a soul sister in my "IT" factor search..
The little things in BARUN and Sanaya by MEENU..
Believe me we vibes in wavelength as to what is the meaning of something special...I am neither a baby in pampers nor a lady with a walking stick ..but somewhere in between those with the soul of evergreen dev anand and the sensibility of Anupam Kher..with a musical edge of Bon jovi mixed with Saigal Saab..yes I'm loony!
Enuf about me..
As u said Indi...Sobti caught me early and believe me. IVe been through my share of smart suave and sizzling male actors and celebrities...but somewhere in the darkness of Shradha...was this glow on Sobtis face...not his stark good looks...but his manner in being on screen his subtleties ..I need not tell you...so also with Sanaya...throwing chana and in her simple pale green night suit with simple straight strands of hair bellowing in the wind...stopped me in my tracks...I was smitten by the poise and fire that a girl in a blue saree stood up to a tyrant in a cocktail party...one who could never say anything nice...and left him speechless...that scene was more than memorable for many reasons...but considering how Sanaya said she was not suited for Khushi initially...she made Khushi her own and no one can look back and choose anyone else to play her...
I read your stories and close my eyes and see them...see them saying feeling doing what you write ..and I can't replace any story in my head with any one but these two characters...as many fans say..any song,any movie,any show,any painting can now be synonymous with ASZr and KKG...such powerful portrayal of those two characters...unforgettable!
As for the silhouette...I'm pulled into it...that thin girl shows promise and soul...seeking direction and solutions to life's questions....the feel is very alluring....the man staring at her...not always wat we envision but wat they do from there is my hope towards a soulful experience.......

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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by A.N.Jell_Zarina on 2013-11-15, 05:53

Lovely update...had saved the page yesterday morning, n finally i read after a whole day n night passed...sigh!
Obvious, anjali-khushi moment... heart touching...
Oh, thats their first meet!!...how beautiful is the scenario...n scary much the situation...
Finally,a feel, he is coming back, she is coming back...by chance, was that a conspiracy?? Loved the flow...interest is graphing up n up n up...thanks for the update dear...

its really great to read tits bits of ur mother-daughter duo...sabi also mentions her daughter time n again...its lovely...btw, might she be right...a fifty two year mom writing abt a 28 year old man is 'disgusting' as sabi's daughter wud say...tsk, tsk u women!!! the situation is definately what the-able...eww disgusting...ha ha...before u throw ny 'i do hav a right to do that' or 'why cant i?'s let me escape n run frm here...
Hope to meet u soon, real soon...

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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by indi52 on 2013-11-15, 19:33

Shegarf71 wrote:Here I find a soul sister in my "IT" factor search..
The little things in BARUN and Sanaya by MEENU..
Believe me we vibes in wavelength as to what is the meaning of something special...I am neither a baby in pampers nor a lady with a walking stick ..but somewhere in between those with the soul of evergreen dev anand and the sensibility of Anupam Kher..with a musical edge of Bon jovi mixed with Saigal Saab..yes I'm loony!
Enuf about me..
As u said Indi...Sobti caught me early and believe me. IVe been through my share of smart suave and sizzling male actors and celebrities...but somewhere in the darkness of Shradha...was this glow on Sobtis face...not his stark good looks...but his manner in being on screen his subtleties ..I need not tell you...so also with Sanaya...throwing chana and in her simple pale green night suit with simple straight strands of hair bellowing in the wind...stopped me in my tracks...I was smitten by the poise and fire that a girl in a blue saree stood up to a tyrant in a cocktail party...one who could never say anything nice...and left him speechless...that scene was more than memorable for many reasons...but considering how Sanaya said she was not suited for Khushi initially...she made Khushi her own and no one can look back and choose anyone else to play her...
I read your stories and close my eyes and see them...see them saying feeling doing what you write ..and I can't replace any story in my head with any one but these two characters...as many fans say..any song,any movie,any show,any painting can now be synonymous with ASZr and KKG...such powerful portrayal of those two characters...unforgettable!
As for the silhouette...I'm pulled into it...that thin girl shows promise and soul...seeking direction and solutions to life's questions....the feel is very alluring....the man staring at her...not always wat we envision but wat they do from there is my hope towards a soulful experience.......
hi meenakshi,

the it factor. such a joy when you cahnce upon it... beyond words that feeling, just a connection. with teh boy it was funnily that.who would have thought i'd be here one day because i happened to switch on the telvision and see a pretty bad episode of shraddha.

and sanaya, honestkly to me she seems to have more i  her than any of the actresses of our screens these days.

together, they spell things that mere words will find impossible to describe. i have sat through silly episodes, nonsensical moments, campy writing, everything too held captive by them to really protest and stalk off.

he is impossibly rare.

together they are a jodi like none i've seen.

they stay alive inside.

thanks so much for that lovely ponder and for reading the story and imagining it with them.

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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by indi52 on 2013-11-15, 19:36

Aasudi wrote:Lovely update...had saved the page yesterday morning, n finally i read after a whole day n night passed...sigh!
Obvious, anjali-khushi moment... heart touching...
Oh, thats their first meet!!...how beautiful is the scenario...n scary much the situation...
Finally,a feel, he is coming back, she is coming back...by chance, was that a conspiracy?? Loved the flow...interest is graphing up n up n up...thanks for the update dear...

its really great to read tits bits of ur mother-daughter duo...sabi also mentions her daughter time n again...its lovely...btw, might she be right...a fifty two year mom writing abt a 28 year old man is 'disgusting' as sabi's  daughter wud say...tsk, tsk u women!!! the situation is definately what the-able...eww disgusting...ha ha...before u throw ny 'i do hav a right to do that' or 'why cant i?'s let me escape n run frm here...
Hope to meet u soon, real soon...
ha ha, delighted to disgust you, sush. maybe my daughter and sabi's should forma a support group or something. :)

thanks for liking without you... i am glad it's getting you interested. putting up next chapter shortly.

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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by Shesherkobita on 2013-11-15, 19:41

indi52 wrote:
Shegarf71 wrote:Here I find a soul sister in my "IT" factor search..
The little things in BARUN and Sanaya by MEENU..
Believe me we vibes in wavelength as to what is the meaning of something special...I am neither a baby in pampers nor a lady with a walking stick ..but somewhere in between those with the soul of evergreen dev anand and the sensibility of Anupam Kher..with a musical edge of Bon jovi mixed with Saigal Saab..yes I'm loony!
Enuf about me..
As u said Indi...Sobti caught me early and believe me. IVe been through my share of smart suave and sizzling male actors and celebrities...but somewhere in the darkness of Shradha...was this glow on Sobtis face...not his stark good looks...but his manner in being on screen his subtleties ..I need not tell you...so also with Sanaya...throwing chana and in her simple pale green night suit with simple straight strands of hair bellowing in the wind...stopped me in my tracks...I was smitten by the poise and fire that a girl in a blue saree stood up to a tyrant in a cocktail party...one who could never say anything nice...and left him speechless...that scene was more than memorable for many reasons...but considering how Sanaya said she was not suited for Khushi initially...she made Khushi her own and no one can look back and choose anyone else to play her...
I read your stories and close my eyes and see them...see them saying feeling doing what you write ..and I can't replace any story in my head with any one but these two characters...as many fans say..any song,any movie,any show,any painting can now be synonymous with ASZr and KKG...such powerful portrayal of those two characters...unforgettable!
As for the silhouette...I'm pulled into it...that thin girl shows promise and soul...seeking direction and solutions to life's questions....the feel is very alluring....the man staring at her...not always wat we envision but wat they do from there is my hope towards a soulful experience.......
hi meenakshi,

the it factor. such a joy when you cahnce upon it... beyond words that feeling, just a connection. with teh boy it was funnily that.who would have thought i'd be here one day because i happened to switch on the telvision and see a pretty bad episode of shraddha.

and sanaya, honestkly to me she seems to have more i  her than any of the actresses of our screens these days.

together, they spell things that mere words will find impossible to describe. i have sat through silly episodes, nonsensical moments, campy writing, everything too held captive by them to really protest and stalk off.

he is impossibly rare.

together they are a jodi like none i've seen.

they stay alive inside.

thanks so much for that lovely ponder and for reading the story and imagining it with them.
So true about Sanaya ... What an awesome actor... She saved me from depression ( seriously)... Sarey din bhar Kheltey rehtay hai ( to  om Prakash)... I always felt she would be fantastic is a sitcom ... Something like Lucille ball... I saw the new photos of Rang rasiya... She looks out of this world ... The hero is in the army! ( gulp)...

The BW world is dumb not to have Sanaya and barun in a movie... How can they not cash in on that! How many stupid Sex in the city movies were made!

Sanaya is one underrated actor... Everyone gushes about barun ( I do too) but Sanaya made it easy for him, didn't she... I have seen horrible actors ( female leads) in so many serials... Imagine if one of them were paired against him ( I'm not naming names) No

Waiting for your new update... bounce 

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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by slmu on 2013-11-15, 20:08

Lovely FF Indi. Waiting for your next update :)

Sabi, I loved the stills from Sanaya's new show too cheers  waiting for it

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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by Shesherkobita on 2013-11-15, 20:20

slmu wrote:Lovely FF Indi. Waiting for your next update :)

Sabi, I loved the stills from Sanaya's new show too cheers  waiting for it
Me too.. She is an awesome actor... I always felt CVs didnt do justice to her character in IPK ( particularly in latter episodes) Indie's writing makes it easy to explore how much more could've been done with her character. I do not know the new lead in that show... Oh well we can't have barun in his place but maybe someday this couple will come back in some show. Meanwhile, I want all the best for her.

Waiting for indi's next chapter.

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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by slmu on 2013-11-15, 20:30

Shesherkobita wrote:
slmu wrote:Lovely FF Indi. Waiting for your next update :)

Sabi, I loved the stills from Sanaya's new show too cheers  waiting for it
Me too..  She is an awesome actor... I always felt CVs didnt do justice to her character in IPK ( particularly in latter episodes) Indie's writing makes it easy to explore how much more could've been done with her character. I do not know the new lead in that show... Oh well we can't have barun in his place but maybe someday this couple will come back in some show. Meanwhile, I want all the best for her.

Waiting for indi's next chapter.
Agreed, Indi's FF is really bringing out what the CVs missed. 

I haven't seen the guy in any show either, but they look good together.

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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by indi52 on 2013-11-15, 21:01

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hi all, thanks for reading. these are the opening lines of the chapter, to read the entire update. please post a comment and you'll be able to read the rest of the chapter. sorry for the bother, enjoy your read.


chapter 3


faith consists in believing when it is beyond the power of reason to believe.
~~~ voltaire~~~



"khushiii!"

she woke up with a start and sat up in bed. arnav ji! no he wasn't there. he was not next to her in their bed. he was in hospital, in a cold hard room with needles all over him and a pipe in his mouth, she heaved with pain as reality rushed in, rending the night. 

her eyes closed as if to shut out the thought, a terrified breath escaped on a shiver. "arnav..." she
whispered, her arnav, in her heart he'd become her arnav, ever since that night she'd let him untie a dori... believing him, trusting him. 


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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by Shegarf71 on 2013-11-15, 21:54

And again my heart clenches in the fist of fate
I hold the past rainbows as a lease on life
Fading in and out of present and memories
As hope provides a cloak and fear cuts like a knife...

Her disdain
Her strength
Her Arnav
Her turmoil
All captured lovingly with including the family and their demeanor..you have brought the experience full circle.
I am totally there with you Indi....
His fury on realizing what may have transpired with that creature in the blue lagoon(ok pool) that he rescued earlier..CHAPP GAYI WOH USSKE DIMAAG MEIN..AB MITT NAHIN SAKTI...
Waiting again for upcoming events in the life of these two..Arnav and Khushi....like Breathing and living..inseparable

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Re: arhi ff: without you... chapter 22, page 30, updated 29/4

Post by A.N.Jell_Zarina on 2013-11-16, 08:24


khamosiyon se gunj rahe, yeh jo teri aahatein...
Lamhe humare,bite huye,tham gaye hai iss pal mein...
Leke rang-se woh yaadien, teri baatein,aai hume jagane...
Naam mera teri hotonse,haan...hai yeh meri dhadkanein...

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Post by A.N.Jell_Zarina on 2013-11-16, 10:01


She's stabalized wth the situation..
he's comatized...
she fears to lose...
still yearns to win...
she is strong, like he is...
jus a lil more of endurance,but every moment - as weighty as a whole life,for everything to set fine...
she knws deep inside, he wil b back by her side...
cuz she is living, her heart is beating...so she hears...
His sound-her melody, in the silent airs...
Stars placed under her pillows...
now, hanged at his sky,their sky...
Lure his faintness,bring hm back...
Their love is immortal,let them fly...

Dear indi, loved it...their family bonding, love that overpowers pain...vulnerability n hope...strength n support...thanks for the update...waiting for the next...
While replying, my replies went blank...whats wrong wth forum page? Its alws like this...uff, hate it...uper se,typing thru useless cell...damn it!! Again, network dumped...in khushistic words 'ek bhi dandi nahin aa raha tha' n neither my asr was waiting beside me to catch my fall...so no options than to wait for 'dandi'...n now finally, i reach here...thanks to 'wiwy' for the idea of asr beating...i so love hm beating the filths...

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