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Post by manu_luv_pari on 2014-04-23, 16:25

Hey guys, i've written this poem first in this forum
i dedicate this for jalal
jahaan kehta tha dil nhi hai hamare paas jamane se chupakar tumko hi banaya khaas teri muhabatt ne hi mere dil se mila diya tanha the zindgibhar hum teri muhabatt ne mera akelapan mita diya

phir kyun nahi ban paya tu aks hamara dil b kafir hum me rehkar ho gaya tumhara teri muhabatt ne ye kaisa sila diya aaj kehta hu tanha to the hum umrbhar aaj teri judaai ne ye yakeen dila diya

2.another one
aaj bebas hai dil wo beraham mujhse juda phir bhi maang raha hu us se jo upar baitha khuda hai marne se pehle khwahish nhi ki wo aakar thame hamari baahein dua bas itni si hai dua rehna hamesha unpar nigaahein kyonki kaanto bhari hai zindgi ki raahein

Guys...plz dont beat if u will bored Plz motivate me with ur valuable cmmnt

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Post by Tanthya on 2014-04-23, 16:32

This is superb, Manu ..Both are equally good par I am slightly partial to the first ..reminded me of Y'day's Jalal ..

Aww..we will get more poems to read n enjoy... 

welcome, My Friend

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Post by manu_luv_pari on 2014-04-23, 16:42

Tanthya wrote:This is superb, Manu ..Both are equally good par I am slightly partial to the first ..reminded me of Y'day's Jalal ..

Aww..we will get more poems to read n enjoy... 

welcome, My Friend
Hey thanks dear...... i had written many shayaries n songs. Should i share with u

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Re: my poem on jalal

Post by Tanthya on 2014-04-23, 16:47

manu_luv_pari wrote:
Tanthya wrote:This is superb, Manu ..Both are equally good par I am slightly partial to the first ..reminded me of Y'day's Jalal ..

Aww..we will get more poems to read n enjoy... 

welcome, My Friend
Hey thanks dear...... i had written many shayaries n songs. Should i share with u


ofc..Anything on JA are welcome .. sweety

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Re: my poem on jalal

Post by --sumana13-- on 2014-04-23, 16:53

Hello Manu ... thanks for sharing this beautiful poem on Jalal .. we would love to read all your sher o shayari 
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welcome to Dhwani my friend 
 hpee

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Post by Sanchu on 2014-04-23, 16:56

pari.really ur poem is awesome.............keep it up...we all r waiting 4 ur next poems.......... long hug  long hug

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Post by manu_luv_pari on 2014-04-23, 17:03

--sumana13-- wrote:Hello Manu ... thanks for sharing this beautiful poem on Jalal .. we would love to read all your sher o shayari 
 Thumbsup 
welcome to Dhwani my friend 
 hpee
thank u so much dear...ok tonight i'll post my shayari which r created for akdha

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Post by manu_luv_pari on 2014-04-23, 17:05

sanchu wrote:pari.really ur poem is awesome.............keep it up...we all r waiting 4 ur next poems.......... long hug  long hug
Thank u sweeti for ur motivation

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Post by Shesherkobita on 2014-04-23, 17:06

That was very nice.... You are very talented... Please write more!

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Post by Maria J on 2014-04-23, 17:06

Hi Manu  long hug 

Loved the poems.. Do share more of them

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Post by Sanchu on 2014-04-23, 17:06

manu_luv_pari wrote:
sanchu wrote:pari.really ur poem is awesome.............keep it up...we all r waiting 4 ur next poems.......... long hug  long hug
Thank u sweeti for ur motivation
we all r frnds here...............& thanks, sorry etc. etc. is n8 justified btween frndship.............so next time, no thnx, no sorry.ok........ hpee  hpee

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Post by cutie pai :-) on 2014-04-23, 17:12

Awesome fab
Manu u r a great writer yaar...
share more with us...

Btw welcome at dhwani am jenny

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Post by cutie pai :-) on 2014-04-23, 17:12

Awesome fab
Manu u r a great writer yaar...
share more with us...

Btw welcome at dhwani am jenny

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Post by candy on 2014-04-23, 17:34

Nice poems manu.. Do share your poems yaar.. Welcome to D manu
hpee

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Post by zuzana on 2014-04-23, 18:26

Wow thats a superb poem  Clap 

Please do share your other ones..would love to read them  hpee 

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Re: my poem on jalal

Post by sarra0 on 2014-04-23, 18:32

Heart Starry Love Starry Love beautiful...loved both poems...both touched something different..each one stiring different feelings...you r very talented...looking froward to reading more...

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Post by pollyanna on 2014-04-23, 22:04

Loved the poems Manu.....look forward to reading more from u :) :)

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Re: my poem on jalal

Post by sunshine99 on 2014-04-24, 03:50

Aapke shabd hain bade manohar..Shahenshah-e-hind ke  DIL ke dastaan ki vyakhya  karein ati uttam:)

Keep writing more...

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Re: my poem on jalal

Post by Jiggy on 2014-04-24, 08:56

dolly....  long hug
what wonderful poems, love.... esp the first
thank you for sharing them with us..... you have an amazing way with words....wow....!!!

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