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Post by ..Tahniat.. on 2014-05-03, 21:46

It had been 7 months since she had gone to Amer. She was gone. She vowed to never come back. She loved him truly. But did not get anything in return. Jalal never loved Jodha. All the memories flashed Back to her.. All the incidents that took place 7 months ago..
7 MONTHS EARLIER
Agra Palace:
Jodha was sitting in her room. Smiling to herself. She was feeling about different today. Her heart was feeling something new. She started feeling for Jalal. He was so good with her. Gave her every happiness in the world. Made her feel so special. She started to fall in love with him. She trusted him blindly. She trusted him so much that she let him touch her. They consummate their marriage. Jodha felt like she was reborn. She felt so fresh! She decided to tell Jalal about her feelings.Then she heard the soldier announcing Jalal.
Badab. Bamulaiza. Hoshiyaar. Shahensha e hind. Badshaah Jalluddin Mohammad tashreef la re h hai..
Jalal entered the room. Jodha gave him her greetings. A smile spread across Jodha's face when she saw Jalal. 
Jalal "Aap muskura kyu rahi hai Jodha?" "Wo Shehensha Hume kuch kehna hai aapse." "Farmaiye Jodha Begum." She was a bit shy to confess her feelings. " Shehensha hum aapse moha.. Mohab.. Mohabbat karte hai." Jalal with a shocked expression "Jodha yeh aap kya Keh rahi hai?? Aap aur humse mohabbat??" " Ji ha Shehensha.. Mohabbat." " Paar Jodha humne to aapko wo nazarye se dekha nahi. Aap to Humari dost hai. Humare paas dil Nahi hai Jodha begum. Muaaf kijiye Lekin hum aapse Mohabbat Nahi karte." Jodha's heart broke but she didnt let that be visible on her face. "Hum aapse Nahi Keh rahe hai Shehensha ki humse Mohabbat kijiye. Hum to baas Keh rahe ki hum aapse mohabbat karte hai." "Jodha begum Hume kuch samey dijiye. Hum soch lete hai. Aab Hume ijazat dijiye." Jodha nodded her head. Jalal left the room. Jodha thought that atleast he didn't reject her. He just wants time.. She will wait for him forever she thought. Suddenly Jodha's eyes fell on the bed where Jalal's sword lay. "Oho! Shehensha aapne shamsheer Yaha bhul Gaye! Hum dekar aate hai.. Ek Shehensha ko Shobha Nahi deta aapne shamsheer ki bina ghumna.." Jodha moved out if her room. She headed towards Jalal's room. A smile plastered across her face. She saw Jalal and Ruqqaiya in the garden. She was about to call Jalal out but stopped when he heard him say her name. "Jodha" she hid behind a pillar to listen what he was saying."Jodha begum ne kaha ki wo humse mohabbat karte hai." Ruqqaiya " Aur apne kya kaha?" "Humne kaha ki Hume thoda waqt chate hai. Ruqqaiya Hume Lagta hai ki hum bhi unse pyaar Karne lage hai.. Ruqqaiya Hum Jodha se mohabbat karte hai.." Jodha blushed.. Then suddenly Jalal and Ruqqaiya were laughing their heart out. " Yeh Khuda! Jab Jodha begum ne kaha ki wo humse mohabbat karti hai to humme Bohot haasi Araha tha. Aab ayi wo Jalal ke Jaal Mei. Wo ek mamuli si Rajkumari chati hai. Aur unhe Lagta hai ki hum Shehensha E Hind usse pyaar karenge?? Kabhie Nahi. Dil tod denge Jodha ka. Pehle hum unse intezaar karwange phir Na keh denge. Jodha to baas ek mamuli si Begum hai. Unki jab dil totega tab humme sukun milega."
Ruqqaiya" ayi thi humse muqabla Karne ke liye.. Hume to Taras Arahi hai un paar."Tears trickled down her eyes. Her world seemed falling apart. She moved forward." Wah Shehensha! Wah! Bohot acchi khel kheli apne humare saath." Jalal turned around n saw Jodha. He was a bit shocked. "Chinta maat kijiye Shehensha.. Aap jit Gaye! Aapne humara dil thod diya hai.. Chote Chote hisso Mei. Aap to Bohot chalak hai! Kissi ka dil tod na koi aapse Sikhe.. Hum ja rahe hai Amer wapaas. Kabhie Nahi aayenge. Aapko humare chere se Itne nafrat hai na?? Hum Kabhie Nahi dekhayenge urh Chehra aapko. 
Maggar ek baat Yaad rakhiye ga.. Kisina kissi se toh aap mohabbat karenge. Ek din ayega jab aap us viyakti ke bina reh Nahi payenge. Jab Uske Saans Mei Apka saans bassa hoga. Uss din Hume zaroor Yaad kijiye ga..

Lekin aapko Kabhie bhi Apka pyaar Nahi milega. Yeh humare dil se di dua hai.. Kabhie Nahi milega Aapka pyaar! KABHIE NAHI!

PRESENT TIME..
Jodha looked outside her window. A pleasant breeze blew over her face. It was so soothing for her wounded heart. She touched her belly. She felt a kick. A smile appeared on her face. "Aap Bohot Khush lage rahe hai. Bohot lat Maar rahe hai aaj aap. Apne Masa ko saatana Apko accha Lagta hai kya??" Just then she heard footsteps. She turned aroun and saw Mainavati "Chaliye Jodha. God bharaiye ka samey ho chuka hai." "Ji masa." Mainavati " Jodha aap phir ek baar soch lijiye. Aap Shehensha ko bata Nahi chate ki Aap unke Ansh ko is duniye Mei Lara hai ha??" Masa aap phirse shuru hogayi? Shehensha ko kabhi Nahi pata chala Chahiye ki hum petse hai. Aab yeh Sab bat chodiye. Chal te hai hum."
The God Bharai rasam started. Jodha was smiling. She kept on touching her belly as the baby was kicking. Everyone presented her gifts and wished that she gives birth to a healthy baby. 

Somewhere near Amer:
Jalal and his troops headed for Amer. they were close. They would reach there within an hour. Jalal was on his horse. He had realized his mistake. He had wronged Jodha. But beside that he wanted to tell her something else. He had found his love. He wanted to tell her that she is the one whom he cannot live without her. He realized how much he loved her in her absence. He wanted to win her back. However Jalal was unaware about his unborn baby. "Jodha Begum hum arahe hai Apko lene. Hum apni Galti ka praischit karenge. Hum aapse Bohot mohabbat karte hai Jodha Begum. Aapke Jaane ke baad Hume yeh ehsaas hua hai ki hum aapke bina jeena Nahi chate. Hum arahe hai Jodha Begum." 

Amer palace:
Everyone was enjoying the God Bharai program. Happiness was I'm everyone's heart except for Jodha. Although she told herself that she didnt need Jalal but her heart screamed for Jalal. During pregnancy every women wants their mate to be with them. To take care of them. Her heart said that she should tell Jalal but her mind stopped her. Although she was happy outside but somewhere inside it was killing her."WAH! Beti ki God Bharai ho rahi hai!" exclaimed the intruder in the God Bharai. "Tera Pati Meri Suhaag hi cheen liya Jodha. Unki kya Galti thi? Wo baas ki wo Shehensha ke Badi Ammi par thodi awaaz uchi ki isilye?" Jodha stood up. The woman continued "Isse dukh ko Mei she Nahi paiyye aur Meri pet me Jo baccha Tha wo Maar Gaya! Aur yeh Sab aapki pati ke waje se. Waha mere baccha Chen ke tu apni God Bharai mana rahi hai??" Everyone stood up. Jodha was shocked. She tried to calm down the lady. " Shehensha ko wo mehsoos karna parega Jo meine mehsoos kiya hai. Unko bhi apna baccha aur Jeevan saathi ko Khona parega." By saying this the lady kicked Jodha's tummy. Jodha screamed out holding her tummy "Aaah!" Just the. The woman took out a dagger and stabbed it on Jodha's hand. All were shocked. Jodha was crying and screaming. "Mera baccha!" She held her stomach and slowly started getting a blury vision. "JODHA BEGUM!" Jalal rushed to Jodha. Jodha was about to fall when Jalal caught her. On the other hand Bharmaal and Jodha's brothers got hold off the woman. 

Jalal took Jodha in his arms "Hakim Sahab ko abhi bulaye.
Jodha akhe koliye. Jodha Akhe Kholiyr. Hum aapko kuch Nahi hone denge" Jalal made Jodha lay down on the bed. Jodha repeating "Shehensha humare bacche hi baccha lijiye." Jalal was tear eyed. Blood was rushing out of her arm and belly. The Hakim hurriedly came to the room. They started the treatment. They told Jalal to go outside and to wait. Jalal went outside. He had loads of questions on his mind. Bharmaal stated "Shehensha hum Jante hai ki aap ke maan me Bohot se sawal hai. Wo Apka baccha hai Shehensha. Aapne Jo kiya Uske baad Jodha Nahi chati thi ki aap iske barre Mei kuch Jane.Hum baas chate hai ki Humari bacchi Jodha phirse thik ho jaye." Jalal "Humara baccha? Jodha begum ne humme bata zaroori Nahi samjha? Yeh Sab humare Galti hai. Nahi hum Jodha begum ka dil Dukha te Nahi yeh din Kabhie Aata." Jalal was felt so guilty. He just wanted Jodha to be safe. Jalal was lost in his thoughts when he heard a baby's cry. HIS BABY. A bandi came out with the baby.Jalal moved forward to the baby. "Mubarak ho Shehensha! Beta hua hai." Jalal took the baby in his arms and hugged it tightly. Jodha fulfilled his wife. His life was now completed. "Jodha begum kaise hai?" The bandi was quiet. Bharmaal "Humari beti thik to hai na??" Jalal"Jawab dijiye!" Jalal could not stand the silence so he dashed inside the room. There he found all the Hakims very tensed. He asked them what was Jodha's condition and they answered " Rajkumariji ki halat Bohot zyada nazuk hai. Aab kissi chamat kaar hi unhe waapas la sakta hai."
Jalal was tear-eyed. He went up to Jodha who was pale and looked so lifeless. Where was his Jodha who was always full of life? He had destroyed that Jodha with his actions. "Jodha begum,Nahi, Marium ul Zamani aap ko wapaas Aana hi parega. Hum aapse apni mohabbat ka izhaar Karne wale the. Maafi mangne wale the. Aur waha aap mar rahi hai. Hum Apko Marne Nahi denge. Aap Shehensha e hind ka Mohanbat hai. Aap humare Jeene ka vaja hai. Mere liye na sahi humare bte ke liye wapaas a jayiye. Aap jab uthegi tab hum Apko saari baat manenge. Aapko tang Nahi karenge. Aapko Bohot pyaar karenge. Aap baas wapaas ajaiye."

Mainavati brought in Jalal jodha's baby with her and gave it to Jalal. " Inke liye aap ka saath zaroori hai Shehensha." Then she left. There Jalal sat with his baby. The baby soon fell asleep.
"Beta, aap Chinta maat kijiye. Jodha begum thik ho jayegi." He kissed his forehead. He had to wait for Jodha. He had to confess his love to her. He had to wait for his lady love to wake up.
Jalal sat beside Jodha. He caressed her face. How could he do this to her?? Why did he do this to her? Now after he realized his mistake and his love for her, she is almost dying. Jalal then remembered Jodha's words that he would never ever get his love. A tear escaped his eye. Then he saw Jodha's hand moving. He screamed out for the doctor. The Hakim immediately came to the room and checked Jodha's condition. Jodha started breathing heavily. She wasn't getting enough air. She opened her eyes slowly. "Jodha Begum, aap thik ho jayengi. Aapko thik Hona parega humare bte ke liye. Humare liye. Jodha Begum hum apse Beinteha Mohabbat karte hai.. Aap Hume Chodkar JA Nahi sakte. Aap use badduwa ko vapas le lijiye. Hume muaf kardijiye." Jalal said it all in tears.Jodha tried to smile at him. "Aap humare bte ka kayal rakhiyega. Humare Jaane ki baad unhe ek Maa ki kami maat hone dijiye ga." Hakim "Mallika aap shant hojaye." "Jodha begum aap Apni Jaane ki baat kaise kar sakte hai??? Aapko hum Jaane Nahi denge." Jodha faints. Hakim gives her all kinds of medicine. "Kuch paal intezaar Karna parega Shehensha." Jalal spent the night sitting beside Jodha and handling his baby. Whenever Jalal puts him on his cott he starts crying. "Dekha Jodha aapke beta kitna ziddi hai. Bilkul aapki tarha." He said to Jodha who lay I'm the bed unconscious. Jalal sits beside Jodha,Salim in his lap who is sleeping soundly, he kisses Jodha's forehead. Jodha's eyelids move. Jodha slowly opens her eyes. Jalal calls the Hakim "arey vaah! Mallika ki to tabiyaat Mei sudhaar hai. Kuch din baad wo bilkul thik ho jayegi.Shehensha agar aap burana mane to aap bahar JA sakte hai." "Zaroor!" Mainavati, Bharmaal and Jodha's siblings rush to her room. The ladies only go
Inside. 

The night passes by. Jalal kept on waiting it was almost noon. He had not seen Jodha.Mainavati and all the ladies leave the room and Jalal enters with His baby.Jodha Begum!" He wanted to hug her tightly and never let go. Jodha sees Her baby and "mere bte ko Zara mere paas dijiye." "Nahi Jodha Begum aap kamzor hai." "Apne bte ko Utha sakti hu Mei." Jodha plays with Salim a little. Jalal "Jodha begum aapne Hume muaf kiya?" "Maafi itni Jaldi milti Nahi. Aapko kuch aisay karna hai ki hum aapko maafi dene ke liye Majboor ho jaye. Aur aisay din kabhi Nahi ayega kyuki hum Majboor Nahi honge." "JODHA BEGUM HUM AAPKO MAJBOOR KARDENGE. Dekhte jaiye." Jalal smirked at Jodha. She rolled her eyes. Let the game of LOVE begin!

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Re: AkDha OS ~Love Untold~

Post by aishakapoor on 2014-05-03, 22:08

woah!! this one is really nice....but one advice...make the words bigger....so tht its easier to read....
i was planning to take this as my ff..but then i thought that it was too early....
but gr8 job!!! loved it!! hpee  long hug

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Re: AkDha OS ~Love Untold~

Post by --sumana13-- on 2014-05-04, 06:43

This is a beautiful story Tahniat .....
Please do share more creations of yours ....

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Re: AkDha OS ~Love Untold~

Post by Sanchu on 2014-05-04, 08:25

Tahniat...............welcome 2 dhwani....................
now let's come 2 d topic.........i really gathered courage....to read this..bcoz i know myself....whatever i say about jj sr..........i  still n8 hav enough courage 2 read or write about post consummation track.son't know why..................b8 tahniat...u hav done really a fr8 job.though i hav n8 read d portion about salim's birth.bcoz.i still can't read dat due 2 my hesitation or something.........it is very dramatic fiction.pls keep it up.......u r doing really a gr8 job......... long hug  long hug ........b8 it is much applicable 4 movies.........whatever........YE DIL MANGE MORE.......... hpee  hpee

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Post by Sanchu on 2014-05-04, 08:56

atlast read it whole.it is so so cute......... peace  peace  luv  luv 

by d way..it all can happen actually except dat ruqu-jallu scene & delivery in amer...............i hav just a question..how could salim stayed all night.in jalal's lap.........b8 when i imagine this story wid our jj RT & PS...it felt really awesome...... Clap  Clap 

a big big hug 2 u my dear Tahniat....... hug1  hug1  long hug  long hug  Kiss  Kiss  Kiss

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Re: AkDha OS ~Love Untold~

Post by candy on 2014-05-04, 12:01

Hey Tahniat..Welcome to D my friend..

How many twists and turns yaar.. I loved reading it.. Wow !!! Very interesting.. Jalal smirking .. majboor kar denge jo ko... Wah ... Love The love game to begin..


Thanks for a interesting OS

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Re: AkDha OS ~Love Untold~

Post by neha on 2014-05-04, 12:36

I totally loved it !  long hug 

Do write more often and welcome to Dhwani dear  hpee 

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Re: AkDha OS ~Love Untold~

Post by lashy on 2014-05-05, 13:54

Hey read it again dear... puraani yaad taazaa ho gayee  long hug my tahni darling

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Re: AkDha OS ~Love Untold~

Post by ..Tahniat.. on 2014-05-05, 21:30

aishakapoor wrote:woah!! this one is really nice....but one advice...make the words bigger....so tht its easier to read....
i was planning to take this as my ff..but then i thought that it was too early....
but gr8 job!!! loved it!! hpee  long hug
This was written way back and posted it this in another place...
Thank u sooo much.. I'll surely post my new creations soon.. long hug

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Post by Jiggy on 2014-05-05, 21:50

this was such a 'aww soo cute' story for me
do keep posting more dear...loved it

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Post by Nanayaa623 on 2014-05-06, 00:10

Hi Tahniat, I could tell a little it was interesting  
 Thumbsup  however since you missed it with Hindi 'I guess' I couldn't enjoy the other parts. However you don't have to change your style of writing.

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Post by ..Tahniat.. on 2014-05-06, 14:53

--sumana13-- wrote:This is  a beautiful story Tahniat .....
Please do share more creations of yours ....

Warmly welcoming you to Dhwani
 hpee long hug 
Thankx dearie!  long hug

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Re: AkDha OS ~Love Untold~

Post by ..Tahniat.. on 2014-05-06, 14:55

sanchu wrote:Tahniat...............welcome 2 dhwani....................
now let's come 2 d topic.........i really gathered courage....to read this..bcoz i know myself....whatever i say about jj sr..........i  still n8 hav enough courage 2 read or write about post consummation track.son't know why..................b8 tahniat...u hav done really a fr8 job.though i hav n8 read d portion about salim's birth.bcoz.i still can't read dat due 2 my hesitation or something.........it is very dramatic fiction.pls keep it up.......u r doing really a gr8 job......... long hug  long hug ........b8 it is much applicable 4 movies.........whatever........YE DIL MANGE MORE.......... hpee  hpee
Thankx dearie... 
I'm a very dramatic type of person so Lolzz. long hug

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Post by --sumana13-- on 2014-05-06, 15:53

..Tahniat.. wrote:
--sumana13-- wrote:This is  a beautiful story Tahniat .....
Please do share more creations of yours ....

Warmly welcoming you to Dhwani
 hpee long hug 
Thankx dearie!  long hug

Waiting for more from you ...
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Re: AkDha OS ~Love Untold~

Post by Sanchu on 2014-05-06, 16:12

--sumana13-- wrote:
..Tahniat.. wrote:
--sumana13-- wrote:This is  a beautiful story Tahniat .....
Please do share more creations of yours ....

Warmly welcoming you to Dhwani
 hpee long hug 
Thankx dearie!  long hug

Waiting for more from you ...
 long hug  Dance  Thumbsup
manu tune nayi wali ff padhi???? 
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