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Post by Tinker_Bell on 2014-10-10, 18:36

Hi.......... I am new to this forum...........but i luv Akdha..... so just putted up this SS with only one chappy.

Mere Pyaar ka ehesaas.

 

Jalal had gone on a war. He was late due to some political reasons........Jodha was getting desperate....It has been 2 months since he has gone on war........she got his letter.....but can't wait for him. Jodha is angry with Jalal as he promised he would come back soon.

 

15 days later

Jodha" Ab toh had ho gayi moti...... Shehenshah abhi tak nahi aaye......hum unse bilkul baat nahi karenge"  Moti" Yeh to namumkin hai Jodha...... aap shenshah se baat na kare" Jodha" Yeh bhi sahi hai......... par hum unse naraz toh hai" 

A moment later shahi nagadas and drums were started beating. Jodha knew that Jalal had returned.

Jalal entered the shahi darwaaza....... all the begums were present except for Jodha. Benezir tried to come close to Jalal but he moved in.( Pls gussa mat hona in my story Benezir is in love with our Jallu)Hamida" Jodha nahi aaengi.......wo aapse khafa hai" Jalal smirked and said" Khair ammijaan..... kya karen unhe samajna hamare bas ki baat nahi hai......kabhi keheti hai ki hume apne shenshah hone ka farz pehele yaad hona chahiye aur ab us par aman kar rahe hai to wo khafa hai kya karen?" Jalal putting another of his signature smirk seeing the balcony before the darwaza where Jodha was standing.Jodha went inside showing her anger. Jalal came to his room and found kheer bowl on his dressing table..... he knew Jodha made it. Benezir entered....... Benezir" Adaab shenshah, Aapne wapas lautne mein der kar di........ khair aap ab laut aae hai to sabh thik lag raha hai" Jalal moved out of his room and walked to Jodha's room..........She was reading a book.....and did not see him entering..... He went to her kanha and touched  the feet of kanha's idol. He went and sat besides her......... he now stood in front of her stopping the light coming on her book. Jodha" Kya kar rahe hai? Hum pustak padh rahe hai........ hatiye.... roshni andar aane dijiye" Jalal" To aap bohot zyaada khafa hai humse......... humse baat tak nahi karengi?" Jodha moved away. Jalal" Jodha begum... Laila Majnu ki kahaani kitni baar padhengi?" Jodha was shocked as she knew he could not read or write...... so how did he know she was reading laila majnu? Jalal"Aap sochengi hume kaise pata chala.......... to yeh suniye.... Aapki aakon se aasun aa rahe the jab aap kitab padh rahi thi..... aur yeh toh pakka hai ki log tabhi rote hai jab ya toh voh Laila Majnu padhte hai ya Heer Ranjha.......... toh phir jab urdu mein likha dekha to yeh samajh aaya ki Laila Majnu hai...... kyuki is mehel mein kitabein sirf Abul ke paas rakhe hai aur unke paas heer ranjha urdu mein nahi hai" Jodha laughed at his smartness........ while Jalal smirked Jodha" Yeh mat samajhiye ki humne aapko maaf kar diya hai........ hum abhi bhi aapse naraz hain...... aapne kaha tha ki jald laut aaenge aur aap 2 mahine baad laut aae hai" Jalal" Kamse kam laut toh aae..... shukar kijiye ki hum aae" Jodha" Matlab aap ana hi nahi chahte the?" Jalal" Aap galat samajh rahi hai Jodha" But kabab mein haddi jaise Benezir entered in between. Jalal was in Jodha's  room. Benezir" Shenshah kitne dino se aapke saath sataraj nahi khela hai aaj khel hi lete hai..... (she puts the board and the coins)" Jodha acts uneffected. But from inside she is burning. They start playing..... Jalal is making her win but that dumbo can't even win like that. Jodha was seeing that. Benezir" Aapke saath khelna mushkil hia shenshah" Jodha came in between..... she moved the queen (of the board) and place two steps before the king and said" Yeh aapki sheh aur shenshah ki maat" Jalal smiles at Jodha. Jalal" Aap kaafi urdu seekh gayi hai Jodha" Jodha smiled and then got angry again. Jalal was confused  at this.

 

Now It was night. Jodha kept karvachaut vrat. Moon came she saw the moon from the mesh and then turned toward the door were Jalal was entering her room.Jalal smiled and stood besides her. Jalal" Abh toh kha lijiye Jodha" Jodha" Aapko pehele hume paani pilana hoga" Jalal made Jodha drink water. Then she went to her kanha and said" Kanha hum teno ki rakhsah karna" Jalal" Teeno? kaun teno? " Jodha"Aap, Ammijaan aur hamara baccha" Jalal's happiness knew no bounds. Jalal" Jodha ..... aap ammijaan bannewali hai?" Jodha" Haan" Hakima sahiba entered that time and said" Jodha begum Baccha nahi bacche" Jodha blushed...... she had two kids.

 

 

9 months later

Jalal was pasing outside Jodha's room. Hakima sahiba allowed Jalal to enter Jodha's room. He went inside and saw both the children with Jodha.He took one of them..... Hamida" Jalal ...... aapki khwaish puri ho gayi hai....... aapko ek ladka aur ek ladki hui hai" Ruquiya" Dono ladke hote toh zyaada accha hota" Jalal" Nahi Ruquiya....... dono ladke hote toh Haram mein chain nahi hota........ sirf ek ladki hi haram mein khushiyaan bhar sakti hai" Jodha smiled at him.

 

They were at the naming cermony. Whole of the Agra was celebrating this.....everyone was present at the naming cermony .Jalal" Hamare paas khuda ke do anokhe tofe hai..... dono se hi hame beintehaan mohobbat hai......... Hum hamari beti ko Roshni naam dena chahate hai" Maulvi" Yeh galat hai shenshah....... yeh dono bacchon ke naam musalmaani hona chahiye...... ye hamare kaum ke khilaf hai..... aap musalmaani hai" Jalal" Yeh sirf hamari nahi Jodha begum ki bhi aulad hai aur vo toh hindu hai" This was enough to make maulvis shut their mouths. Jodha" Hum apne bete ko Salim naam denge" The whole agra was happy.

 

16 yrs later

Roshni" Abu ...... bas bohot ho gaya aur kitna gussa karengi hum par...... ek matka hi toh tuta hai" She made a puppy face which melted Jalal's anger.

 

Everyone was in the haram everyone was now fighting to take care of salim...... He jumped out of their clutches and said" Bacche ki jaan loge kya....... chodiye hame........kyu pareshaan kar rahe hai?" Jalal enters the haram. Jalal laughs at salim. Salim" Abu hana band kijiye....... yeh sabh aapki kartoot hai....... aapke wajah se hum yahan phas gaye hai...... aap shaitani band nahi karenge kya? Khuda ke liye hume maaf kijiye" Roshni" Sahi toh hai.......... aap na hame chodte hai na ammijaan ko........ pata nahi dadijaan aapko kaise sambhalti thi?" Jalal" Hum aur shaitani......... hum ne aaj tak kabhi shaitani nahi ki hai...... humpe galat ilzaam mat lagaiye......... hum bohot shaant the" Roshni and Salim together" SHAANT !!!!!! aur aap" Jalal" Toh iska sabut pesh kiyije ki ham shaitan hai" Salim" Pesh kya karna hai abu....... Sabut anr gawa dono hi hum aur roshni hai..... hum is duniya mein hai yeh aapki shaitani nahi hai?" Everyone laughed hard. Roshni" Aur isse hume ek sawal aaya hai ki hum Rajput hai ya Mughal?" Hamida" Jalal ... yah aapse zyaada tez niklen hai." Roshni" Abh kya karen dadijaan.... yeh hoshiyaari toh hamare khoon mein hai...... abh ammijaan ur abu dono hi hoshiyaar hai.....toh yeh hoshiyaari hamare khoon mein hai na" Hamida"Maan liya.... Jodha ne shaitan ko janam diya hai." Salim" Sirf ammijaan ki aadatein thodi hai hum mein abu ki bhi toh hai........... yeh sari begumein na Abu ke bhole shakal pe marti hai.... par akal pata chale toh bas kaam khatam" Everyone was laughing. Ruquiya" Aap dono hi Mughal hai" Roshni" Nahi......hum hindustaani hai" Ruks" Kaise?" Roshni" Hindustan mein konse log hai?" Ruks" Hindu aur muslmaan" Roshni" To aakhir mein yeh kehe sakte hai ki hindu aur musalmaan dono milake hindustaan banate hai thik?" Ruks" Haan........ Toh jab hum mein hindu aur muslamaan dono ka khoon hai toh hum hindustaani hue na!!!!" Roshni is too clever for ruks. Ruks went dumbstuck but said" Par ..... shenshah ke kaum hi aapki pehechaan hai... aur Mughal Rajput se zyaada takatvar hai..... isiliye aap Mughal hai" Salim" Yeh kaise......... Yahan Bhaijaan toh puri Mughal toli ke sainik se takatvar hai" Ruks" BHAIJAAN? Kon bhaijaan?" Salim" Abh hindu ke riwaj ke hisab se Maan Singh hamare bhaijaan hue" Ruks" Aur voh kaise?" Salim" Dekhiye..... hindu riwaj ke mutabik agar bhai ke bete behen ke bete ke bhai hai........ toh abh Bhagwan Das ji Ammijaan ke bhaijaan hai toh unke bete Maan Singh hamare bhaijaan hue" Jalal  laughs..... and says" Toh salim aapne apne bhaijaan se kya sekha hai?" Salim" Kisi ko bhi kam nahi samajh na chahiye......pure diwan e khaas mein sabhse chote hai par sirf hume bade hai .....par hum diwan e khaas mein nahi hai..........phir bhi sabse zyaada takatvar hai aur abu ke sabhse karib hai...... aur unke nav ratna mein se ek hai...... aur abu ke navratna mein aana khaas toh hai" Ruks" Par Jalal se koi nahi jeet sakta ..... apke bhaijaan bhi nahi" Jodha enters worried.... Roshni" Kya hua hai ammijaan? Aap itni pareshaan kyu hai?" Jodha" Kuch nahi....... zyaada badi baat nahi hai" Jalal" Jodha begum bata dijiye.....hua kya hai?" Jodha" Kya bataien hame dar hai Maan Singh aur nahi chup rahenge.....bohot krodh mein hain..... ab hame mushkil yeh hai ki phir se ve is ladai mein phas jaaenge aur phir bhabisa aur pareshaan ho jaaengi" Jalal" Par hua kya hai.....Kise nahi chodenge?" Jodha" Aadham Khan!!!....... Bohot dino se unhe pareshaan kiye jaa rahe hai......... aur unke doston ko bhi pareshaan kar rahe hai........abi to Maan Singh se baat karke aa rahe hai...... Ab phirse Maan Singh Aadham ke saath ladai karenge" Jalal gets up and goes to Maan Singh. Jalal" Maan Singh..... kya ho raha hai? Adham aapko pareshaan kar rahe hai aur aap chup hai" Maan Singh" Shenshah.... humne unhe abhi tak kuch nahi kiya kyuki vo aapke bhai hai...... aur hum Maham Anga ji ko pareshaan nahi karna chahate the" A boy comes from behind as of the same age as Maan Singh. He says" Maan....... phir se aa gaya hai vo...... is baar to Sujata (Maan Singh's sister)ko bhi mara hai..... abh tu hi kuch kar" Now Maan Singh was anger than before without completing talking with Jalal he goes. Jalal is afraid that Adham's condition will be bad today.

Adham" To tum aa hi gaye..... aaj ladoge ya hamesha ki tarah bhaag jaaoge? Aap Rajput mein to khauf hota hai hum Mughalo ka" Maan" Hume...... zyaada mat uksaie..... hamare yahan bado ko samman diya jata hai...... Haath uthana dur ki baat aakh utha ke bhi nahi dekhte.... aap humse bade hai isi liye chup hai" Adham" Ye tho sirf bahana hai bachne ke liye" He hits Sujata and even his frnds........ Jalal reaches the spot but thinks everything is now out of control. Everyone.... Rukku, Salima, Jodha, Salim, Roshni and Maham comes there. Adham hits Sujata hard now Maan Singh hits Adham so hard that blood comes out his face. He hits blue and black out of him. Adham is badly injured........ Jalal comes and stops them in between. THe fight stops but still Adham is hurt badly. Salim smiles at Ruks.

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Re: AKDHA SS Pyaar ka ehesaas

Post by Tanthya on 2014-10-10, 19:03

Hi, I like the fact that you kept the character consistency through the time flow ..

You know would love to read a SS where Adham Khan is a Clown and is a funny man

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Re: AKDHA SS Pyaar ka ehesaas

Post by --sumana13-- on 2014-10-10, 19:13

Thanks for the wonderful story 
please do follow this up with the next update 
hpee Thumbsup

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Re: AKDHA SS Pyaar ka ehesaas

Post by slmu on 2014-10-10, 19:19

Lovely FF Tinker .. keep them coming

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Re: AKDHA SS Pyaar ka ehesaas

Post by sonshine487 on 2014-10-10, 19:34

Nice!
Can we have more?

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Post by zuzana on 2014-10-10, 19:42

That was awesome tinker..I loved Akhda scenes..u have given a freshness to them  hpee...Please continue

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Post by Shesherkobita on 2014-10-10, 19:43

Tinker bell .... You are awesome ... And you are just 14 yrs old ! I have a 11 yr old daughter who couldn't write 1/3 rd of what you wrote ... So proud of you ... Please keep writing more ... long hug

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Post by sonshine487 on 2014-10-10, 20:16

Shesherkobita wrote:Tinker bell .... You are awesome ... And you are just 14 yrs old !  I have a 11 yr old daughter who couldn't write 1/3 rd of what you wrote ... So proud of you ... Please keep writing more ... long hug

don't be so hard on ur 11 yr old
my 12 yr old couldn't read something 1/4 its size properly
all he's interested in is comics...

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Re: AKDHA SS Pyaar ka ehesaas

Post by Tinker_Bell on 2014-10-11, 16:26

Sorry Guys!!! I just wanted to keep this an OS but i thought I am adding the future so thought to put the SS title ...... It will be only one chapter!!!! but would love to write another FF on your request.... really sorry!!!!!

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